A New Horizon – #FFfAW

The sea looked calm and serene unlike the turmoil Rishabh felt inside him. Sitting at the bar downing many a drinks, he looked over the horizon. Was his mind playing a trick on him or was it really Pia walking towards him?

………..….

He had met Pia in this very bar 6 years ago. He could remember it like it was yesterday. He couldn’t take his eyes off her from the moment he saw her. That was the beginning of a beautiful love story. Living by the beach with their adorable daughter, they led an idyllic life. But destiny had other plans. He lost Pia to a fatal accident and life as he knew, shattered.

…………….

Hazily he stumbled across the wooden fence and wrapped his arms around her…

It looked all too real then; the words she spoke, her warm embrace…was that all a dream?

It was time to bid a final goodbye to ‘The Chelsea Beach Bar’. He had her wishes to fulfil, her memories to keep alive through their daughter.

 

Photo prompt
183rd Challenge FFfAW – Pic Courtesy Michelle DeAngelis.

 

(173 words)

Linking this post to the 183rd Challenge Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers . The challenge is to write a piece of fiction within 100-175 words based on a photo prompt. Thanks to Priceless Joy for hosting this challenge.

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43 Comments Add yours

  1. Abhijit Ray says:

    Was he dreaming of Pia under influence of alcohol and got up next morning?

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    1. Hah…I know there seems to be a disconnect there, but the word limit posed a constraint in adding even a few extra details…It started out as a 450 words story and had to edit to 175 and this is what happens i guess. Let me try editing…and thank you for being so kind about it.

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      1. Abhijit Ray says:

        It is a nice story. Still plausible. May be he is not as much in love.

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      2. Oh he is very much in love…atleast according to my story…couldn’t say it in so many words though…Do read it now. I had made a few changes…hope it fits in now.

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      3. Abhijit Ray says:

        Ok

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    It worked for me, I could sense his loss and yet life goes on and he has to pick himself up. Well written.

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    1. Thank you Iain. This is my first FFfAW attempt. It was very difficult to edit a 450 words story to under 175…I just wish i could have had a few more word allowance…but that’s what the challenge is all about, isn’t it? Thank you for reading and for those encouraging words…Means a lot!

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      1. Iain Kelly says:

        You’re very welcome, hope to read more of your stories 🙂

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      2. That would be great. Hope to read many of yours too.

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  3. A tale of love and loss, but ends on a note of hope.

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    1. Yes…thank you so much Damyanti.

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  4. Anagha Yatin says:

    Accepting the reality is not an easy job, specially when you are grieving the loss of the loved one. Life, however, doesnt stop for any one. It goes ahead with its own pace, leaving much to us to match the steps. Happy to see that he is giving it a try to match the steps!

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    1. You summed it up so rightly. Yes, moving on is the only way forward. Thank you so much Anagha.

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  5. So very sad that he misses her so much that his dreams of her are very real.Great story!!

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    1. Thank you so much. It’s so encouraging to read your comment and It’s so wonderful to hear from you.😊

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  6. Jade M. Wong says:

    Aww I hope he is able to move on and stay strong for their daughter.

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    1. Thank you so much Jade. I am really hoping and think he will… Thanks for stopping by and sharing your thoughts with me.

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  7. Honestly, I didn’t get the feeling that it had been brutally edited like you’d mentioned. It’s flowing quite smoothly, and I GOT it easily. Welcome to the gang, btw 🙂

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    1. Thank you so much Anurag. That’s so nice of you … Your comment made my day. Glad to be a part of FFfAW.

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  8. That’s a heart-touching take dear.

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    1. Thanks Roma. So glad you could see the beauty in it…I had a heart-wrenching time cutting it short to the prescribed word limit. I am so glad you could feel the emotions.

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  9. Priya says:

    A beautiful story, Kalpana. thought about the movie ‘p.s. I love You’.
    One of my favorite movies.
    loved your story. cheers! 😀

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    1. Thank you so much Priya. I am so glad you liked it and it’s so heartening to know it reminded you of that beautiful movie. I am ecstatic. Thank you.

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  10. Neha Jain says:

    Wow that’s nice read, thank you for sharing

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    1. Thank you Neha. Glad you liked it.

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  11. Such a poignant tale. Not all love stories end on a happy note and life goes on.

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    1. Very true Vartika. Thanks for stopping by.

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  12. Rashi Roy says:

    That’s beautifully written and edited to fit into the word limit. Sometimes its really difficult to end such heartening stories because of word limit but you have done a great job. Loved it.

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    1. Thank you so much Rashi. This means a lot! because i kept thinking it won’t make sense without elaborate descriptions i had written and editing was such a painful task you know. So your comment is so heartening to read. Thank you for that confidence booster!

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      1. Rashi Roy says:

        You are welcome! Keep up the great work 🙂

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      2. Will surely try my best dear Rashi.

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  13. Deepti Menon says:

    Kalpana, I could sense the feeling of loss in Rishabh’s heart and a sudden surge of hope as he thought that Pia was walking towards him. The last line talks of hope and resurgence as well. Word limits can really limit one’s imagination, but you have written a lovely story! 🙂
    #DeepTiesReads #MyFriendAlexa

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    1. Thank you so much Deepti. You don’t know how much this means to me. Because i was doubting myself and wondering how in the world will i be able to convey all this in the word limit proposed. And so your comment is so refreshing to hear and such a confidence booster. Thank you so much for this.

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      1. Deepti Menon says:

        You’re always welcome, Kalpana! Good writing always beckons!

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  14. Suchita says:

    That was such a sweet story. A bittersweet end – marvelous

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    1. Thank you Suchita. I am so glad you liked it.

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  15. Good story. I like fiction, so loved this.

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    1. Thank you so much. So glad you like it.

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  16. Dipika Singh says:

    That’s a story of a weeping heart, who wants to be with his soulmate but earthly duties are keeping him ground-bound. Lovely take.
    #MyFriendAlexa #gleefulreads

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    1. Thank you Dipika. So glad to know you understood the intensity and depth of his love. That’s what i wanted to convey. This comment is a validation that i could convey that. Thank you for this.

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  17. Well written short story of love, loss and hope.

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    1. Thank you so much. Glad you liked it. and so happy to know i was able to convey all that in such limited words.

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